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The New Evil: Book One, The Lost Son

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<[1]> A New Beginning.

Chapter One..

May 19, 3964
Strathomance Mountains, Gildwel
South-Earth


Airadan is sitting close to a slow streaming river. The sun is nowhere to be found. Legolas comes sit next to Airadan. “What’s wrong? You’re not happy, that’s first.”¯ Said Legolas “Well, it’s about something I found.”¯ Said Airadan back to Legolas` “And what did you found, tell me, I’m bored anyway. I need a long, long vacation. Or maybe a long travel.”¯ “I found this weird ring. Just lying in the water”¯ Said Airadan and Legolas gave him a strange look. “So what’s the point?”¯ Said Legolas “I don’t know, I just feel so cold.”¯ Said Airadan a sort of disappointed. “Then let’s have a cup of chocolate milk”¯ Said Legolas en punched him in his stomach. “Yeah, that’s a good idea.”¯ Said Airadan with a smile. And walked away.

The next morning Airadan got out of his bed early en went washing. After that he ran outside to see Legolas, they were supposed to hunt boars. Airadan knocked on his door but no one answered. He runs to Legolas’ friend Sidhlairiel. “Hey, did you see Legolas; we were supposed to go out hunting.”¯ “Yes, I saw him hurrying to his horse. He said something about an old friend Gandalf. I think he went to him.”¯ Said Sidhlairiel calm. “Gandalf?”¯ “Yes, He also said something that the dark lord Sauron forged a ring, again. And that he thinks that it washed away to south-earth.”¯ Said Sidhlairiel again calm. “Do you know where Gandalf is?”¯ Said Airadan “He is at Ghalos in the western Glades”¯ Said Sidhlairiel and before she could say something, he was gone. Airadan ran to his horse and jumped on, and fell of. He tried again and sprinted away…


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BreakingDawn
BreakingDawn zei op 13 juni 2010 - 9:33:
Heb je je verhaal misschien ook in het nederlands?
Kan wel goed engels maar ben gewoon te lui om het in het engels te lezen...
Het onderwerp sprak me wel erg aan =)


LadyLondon
LadyLondon zei op 22 dec 2009 - 19:59:
Hmm op zich is Chocolate Milk niet echt fout. ... Maar hot chocolate, dat zeggen ze vaker. maarja. goed er word niet aan gewerkt meer.. echt..


RiotGirl zei op 10 aug 2009 - 19:57:
Hm... Ik zie zo nu en dan nog wel eens foutjes... In de eerste zin begin je met de tegenwoordige tijd ("Is sitting", "is nowhere", maar als iemand praat is het verleden. ("said". Ik ben niet zo goed in Engels, dus kan al die tijden niet uitleggen zonder mijn Engelse boek (die uiteraard is ingeleverd op school xP), maar het viel me op.
Ook heb je nog wel eens de verkeerde woorden. Chocolade melk is in het Engels bijvoorbeeld gewoon "chocolate", niet "chocolate milk".
Misschien kun je iemand die wat ouder is vragen het na te lezen op foutjes?